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  • お題
  • 生徒様の解答
  • 修正点
  • まとめ

 

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今回のお題

 

お題とポイントはこちらです。

Do you think that rich countries should do more to help poor countries develop?

 

 

POINTS

・Inequality
・Economic Growth
・Domestic Issues
・Enough

生徒様の解答を見ていきましょう。

 

生徒様の解答

 

生徒様の解答です。

I think rich countries should do more to help poor countries develop. I have two reasons.
Firstly, rich countries and poor countries are unequal in many ways. For example, poor countries are inferior to rich countries in terms of finances educational environments. Rich countries should support poor countries to eliminate such inequalities.
Secondly, to achieve economic growth on a global scale, not only rich countries but also poor countries need to grow. As poor countries’ economies grow, trade will flourish in each country.
If poor countries grow economically like rich countries, it will help to solve social problems such as hunger.
In conclusion, because of these reasons, I think rich countries should do more to help poor countries develop.

(119words)

 

いかがでしょうか^^?

 

修正点を直していきましょう。

修正点

 

修正後の文を見ていきましょう。

 

どこが違うか見比べながら読んでください^^。

I think rich countries should do more to help poor countries develop. I have two reasons.

Firstly, rich countries and poor countries are unequal in many ways. For example, poor countries are inferior to rich countries in terms of financial and educational environments. Rich countries  should support poor countries to eliminate such inequalities.

Secondly, to achieve economic growth on a global scale, not only rich countries but also poor countries need to grow. As poor countries’ economies in poor countries grow, trade will flourish in each both countries. If poor countries grow economically like just as rich countries, it will help to solve social problems such as hunger.

In conclusion, because of these reasons, I think rich countries should do more to help poor countries develop.

(121words)

 

 

とても良く書けています^^。

 

細かい修正点です。

注意して書くと点数アップにつながります。

 

 

2つの形容詞として平行して書けば、とても綺麗におさまります。

finances educational environments.
in terms of financial and educational environments.
語順にも気を付けて書いてみましょう。
そして、Asは同時を表す接続詞なので、後ろの文と時系列をそろえるのが普通です。
As poor countries’ economies grow, trade will flourish in each country.
As economies in poor countries grow, trade flourishes in both countries.
などなど、細かいところをしっかり確認しましょう。

まとめ

 

いかがでしたでしょうか。

 

次年度の英検対策、随時募集中です。

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