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  • お題
  • 生徒様の解答
  • 修正点
  • まとめ

 

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今回のお題

 

お題とポイントはこちらです。

Do you think license is necessary to ride a bicycle?

 

 

POINTS
●Accidents
●Traffic regulations

●Children
●universal vehicles

 

生徒様の解答を見ていきましょう。

 

生徒様の解答

 

生徒様の解答です。

 I think the license is necessary to ride a bicycle. I have two reasons.

Firstly, there are many traffic accidents caused by bicycles. In a survey says that the number of bicycle accidents is the highest among all of traffic accidents. This is because, people who use bicycles can be both perpetrators and victims of accidents. This means that bicycles have same risks of accidents as cars that need license.

Secondly, children do not understand (how dangerous) the dangers of riding bicycles. When I was walking a street, a bicycle which was rode by a child passed by me with fast speed, I was almost run over it. Also children do not have ability to protect by themselves.

If the license become necessary to ride bicycles, the age of people who use bicycles will getting higher, more people will follow the rules, and traffic accidents will decrease.

In conclusion, because of these reasons I think the license is necessary to ride a bicycle.

(160words)

 

いかがでしょうか^^?

 

修正点を直していきましょう。



 

修正点

 

修正後の文を見ていきましょう。

 

どこが違うか見比べながら読んでください^^。

 I think the license is necessary to ride a bicycle. I have two reasons.

 

Firstly, there are many traffic accidents caused by bicycles. A survey says that the number of bicycle accidents is the highest rate among all of traffic accidents. This is because, people who use bicycles can be both perpetrators and victims of accidents. This means that bicycles have the same risks of accidents as cars that need a license.

 

Secondly, children do not understand the dangers of riding bicycles. When I was walking a street, a bicycle which was rode by a child passed by me with fast speed. I was almost run over it. Also, children can not protect by themselves.

If the license becomes necessary to ride bicycles, the age of people who use bicycles will be getting higher, more people will follow the rules, and traffic accidents will decrease.

 

In conclusion, because of these reasons I think the license is necessary to ride a bicycle.

(161words)

 

 

特に冠詞、動詞の確認、自動詞他動詞の確認が必要です。

 

カンマの有無にも気を付けて書けたらいいかと思います。

 

In a survey says,

 

A survey says, OR In a survey, an expert says that-.
Alsoの後ろは必ずカンマが必要です。
Protectは他動詞なので、動詞の後ろには名詞が必要です。
Also children do not have ability to protect by themselves.

 

Also, children can not protect themselves.
などなど、細かいところをしっかり確認していけば、合格点に必ず近づきますよ^^。

 

 



まとめ

 

いかがでしたでしょうか。

 

次年度の英検対策、随時募集中です。

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